BLOG #12

With writing a great scene comes knowledge of the character's behavior, proper setting and a steady plan. My scene delves into Baxter's mind and his internal thoughts and daydreams. The scene really explores his thoughts on his dad leaving him and how it effects him everyday. By him being embaressed in the beginning of the scene, it expresses his troubles with school. When he has a daydream of his birthday party, it is demonstrated how he has memory of his dad but it is slowly fading away. I am proud of my scene because of how I characterize Baxter: a troubled kid who daydreams about the way things used to be. He misses his father and all he really wants in life is a chance to see him again. However, with first drafts comes much needed room for improvement. At times this scene can be cliche, and the teacher is a little too bold. In a movie script it is important for the dialogue to be realistic, if that is what you intend to do. My script is intended to be realistic and easy to relate to. If I had the chance to re-write it I would add in more of the daydream, with pieces missing and it being a little more vague. A daydream or flashback is usually very foggy with things that just cannot be remember. It would be more realistic if Baxter couldn't fully remember what happened on his birthday with his father when he was young. I would change the way the teacher approaches him and not have him embaress Baxter in front of the whole class when he asks him about the appointment. In reality, a teacher would probably not do that to a student but I would still make Baxter feel uncomfortable to show his dislike for school and the appointments. This scene is short but concise and true to Baxter's character.